Gloaming

Gloaming – Petrachian Sonnet

Wandering in the gloaming, you and I,
clasping hands, together we are steady
as we jump across a pooling eddy
sea gulls wheel above with their mournful cry.
Violet clouds gleam in the mustard sky
to catch a fly lizard freezes ready,
tongue unfurls, the fly flees in a frenzy,
landing in a craggy tea tree bonsai.
A thin ray of light caught your titian hair,
dark burnished russet flooded through my veins,
your eyes were following the flying gull;
the sun lets out a dying golden flare,
its rosy bloom leaving exquisite stains,
we embrace nostalgia in our silk lull.

Linked to Jingle Potluck Monday and dVerse The Watering Hole

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23 thoughts on “Gloaming

  1. Seriously exquisite work, marousia! My God! You really painted those words with color…dark russet through my veins…mustard sky. I could almost taste this poem! Enviable poetics here. :)))

  2. Really great stuff. Not many try their hands at sonnets and even fewer succeed at making one this pretty.

    Though, in one line I think your word order got mixed: “Your were eyes following the flying gull;”

    Just thought I’d let you know. It can happen to all of us and I would want someone to tell me.

  3. i’m sorry, Marousia ~ i was here earlier and would have sworn i left a comment!

    i often don’t find a sonnet touching me, but yours certainly does! i especially love ~

    “The sun lets out a dying golden flare,
    Its rosy bloom leaving exquisite stains,
    We embrace nostalgia in our silk lull.”

    it takes a wonderful talent like yours to use such a demanding form but still portray such vivid imagery and lovely emotions. i will use one of your words ~ exquisite! ♥

  4. I have not done a sonnet so this form and words are interesting.

    like these lines:
    “The sun lets out a dying golden flare,
    Its rosy bloom leaving exquisite stains,
    We embrace nostalgia in our silk lull.”

    Thanks for sharing this ~

  5. oh i love the mustard sky… and you’ve written such a great italian sonnet , they’re my favs and yours flows very naturally and unforced.. very nice..

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