Morning Harmony – After Baudelaire

After Baudelaire’s Harmonie du Soir

Morning Harmony

Darkness painted grey trembles in the breeze,
Each star fades away like musk perfume,
Bird songs fill the silence in the morning air,
A sanguine jive of pretty opportunities.

Each star fades away like musk perfume,
A magpie trills its poignant hopes,
A sanguine jive of pretty opportunities,
The sun answers with a rosy glowing smile.

A magpie trills its poignant hopes,
A grateful heart, adoring scents of earth,
A sanguine jive of pretty opportunities,
The sun reveals its glories in a clear blue sky.

A grateful heart, adoring the scent of earth,
Gathers close its grown up brood,
The sun reveals its glories in a clear blue sky,
Inviting all to hunt and love and play.

For NaPoWriMo


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24 thoughts on “Morning Harmony – After Baudelaire

  1. Marousia, wonderful write. i love the form and Baudelaire so really enjoyed your contribution here. Unfortunately I can never remember poetry by name, so I’ll have to go and read the piece again and return at which point I’m certain a deeper understanding shall occur. But by itself it works really well. Thanks for the write

  2. Ahh, I just noticed it’s up on the introduction, skipped right over as I know this form so well. Some nice work in there . Your piece grows in meaning and flavor after reading Baudelaire’s work. Thanks again:)

  3. The poem is lovely – I see how you copied the form from Baudelaire – it is more nearly French in its composition and subject matter than Malaysian, or even English; but most importantly it is your variation with your voice speaking freely here. I hope you do one as well closer to form- I’d love to see it. I enjoyed this one very much. Gay

  4. oh this is lovely marousia…your really bring the visuals alive…tried my first pantoum tonight…ugh i find form restricting…but you play so well within it…loved it…

  5. A sensuously soft and living piece–the form is shaken up a bit, and spills an extra batch of images because of it, so who’s caring? Beautiful, structured, yet retaining some of the unrestricted ebb and flow feel of free verse.

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