Dancing with Words: A Dark Duet?

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My post yesterday sparked some great discussions. I focus here particularly on the discussion I had with Monocle who has been writing  duets for a while.

Monocle drew my attention to a duet he wrote with Scarlett Greyson. Both are writers of erotica and will be familiar to many in Twitter as Monocle and Aislingweaver. The poem is called Castle Walls ~ A Senryu Story. Interestingly Scarlett says that she thought of Twitter as a social media to keep up with friends and “kill time”. She posted an exploratory senryu and unwittingly started a collaborative  narrative poem using senryu as verses.

He also wrote a poem with @Your__Dreamer called Fallen Angel. Both authors posted the poem on their blobs. Dreamer’s is here. What I found fascinating is the different kind of layout each poet chose to lift the poem out of the twitter environment. What I found fascinating was the way Monocle distinguished the different points of view  through his layout. I felt it really added another whole layer to the meanings a reader can take from the words.

In a duet, two voices each take a part. In a Fallen Angel, however, something different was happening. If you look at Dreamer’s version you can see a pattern of a dialogue, however Monocles reveals something quite different. The poem is polyphonic.

This got me thinking ~ I wonder how many forms are being brought in to dances with words? And how many points of view can entwine in a single poem?

4 thoughts on “Dancing with Words: A Dark Duet?

    • I think it depends on the poem. When Dreamer and I were going back and forth for these stories – certainly the first one, I had no idea what it was or where it was going until at least half way through. At first it was an exchange of imagery on a theme, but somewhere in there I realized we had character and plot – and were speaking with characters’ voices. She may have figured it out before I did – I can be pretty slow. But after the first, the other senryu stories were a bit more premeditated – usually one grabbed the seed from the other and ran with it. I think most of the time the seed poem was not intentionally set up to be the start of a story; they just got pounced upon.

      As far as voices is concerned, If your poem is also a story, I think you’re not limited to the two (or however) many voices of the collaborators. The issue of voices – or characters, really – is identical to keeping voices distinct in any collaborative fiction. For Fallen Angel, I heard 5 distinct voices through the story as we developed it, and organized the stanzas accordingly.

      I look back at these various collaborations and remember how enjoyable they were. I highly recommend the exercise for both poets and writers.

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